Surn's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Garnachas (parodia)]

The language barrier

If you want to get anywhere on Newgrounds you'll have to have English subtitles.

[Portal 2 (School Project)]

Mah Boi!

Academic success does not equal real-world success. The typography was okay but the actual animation lacked refinement. Keep practicing and get better.

[Airplane Animation]

Mah boi!

Academic success does not equal real world success. You've got a decent grasp of flash but you need to practice more and polish your skills.

VJElectramorhipism responds:

Ok thanks for the info.

[Lf2 Deep's Revenge]

That was it?

Not much of an episode. All it consisted of was some Goku wannabe running up to and whacking some shadow guy as he just stood there and took it. There wasn't even any music. Still, you seem to have decent spriting skills but you need to put more time into your work.

[The spikes]

An interesting change of pace....

Instead of fighting each other they are slowly killed by what they have no defense against...

The music overlaps as it plays over, try setting you music to "stream" instead of "event". You would also do well to look into adding a preloader.

[AF: The Backstabber]

It had a plot...

As you are likely aware, the visuals were quite poor. However, unlike most videos of this visual quality it actually had a decent plot.

jonohomo responds:

thanks for commenting

[Thunder pooh]

Heh,heh,

Well you certainly managed to make the voice sound like that of Vinni Puh. You also did a fairly good job of remixing the cartoon. Too bad so few people know about Vinni Puh.

[Hero Teaser]

Good For Your First, but not great.

Art:
Your art skills are fairly good for a beginner but still needs plenty of refining. The highlights (white marks) in the hair didn't really work since they seemed to be all over the place. On the other hand you seemed to do a real good job with the face itself. The face was nice and cartoony but even then the expression was mostly blank and didn't "match" the song.

Animation:
Minimal. The scrolling night sky at the beginning was pretty good (though the moon was a bit crude) but the singer didn't move enough and the camera was fixed on him for too long. One thing you have to keep in mind is that your audience can get tired of looking at the same thing for a prolonged period of time. While the main character did have multiple mouth frames (closed, open, "O" shape) he could have done with a wider range of expressions (that one "laughey" face just doesn't cut it) and some hand gestures.

Audio:
A trademarked song and a gunshot (kudos on tracking it down). Every thing seemed to sync up to the audio pretty well (perhaps the best thing you had going for this)

Misc:
The play button seems to be a bit tricky to hit. I usually put a square at full invisibility over the entire shape (in your case, the word play). This way the user doesn't have to land the cursor on a small activation point.

Overall It's a good start. Don't get discouraged and try to improve.

P.S.
If you'd like to try a different "loveish" song without copyright breathing down your neck I recommend this gem:
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/225601

If you're going to use cartoon characters again I'd recommend speeding it up about 45%

DnCFlash responds:

wow that is alot but ty now i know where i need to improve and thanks for the links i will try to do better and ty for a 4 on the review i wasnt even expecting that but ty i will try harder on my next attempt and sorry about the play button i didnt under stand the whole thing on how to make them but like 2 min ago found a great tutorial on how to do it so now i know

[mario the adventure]

Sure fire Winner!

Idolized trademarks? Upbeat music? Sensory overload, anime-intro action? This is a sure fire way to get a high rating on newgrounds!

Two main complaints:
1. No intro screen or play button:
Very unprofessional. This gives the appearance of a shaky start which will definitely drag your mark down regardless of how good your work is.

2. Mario as fast as Sonic?
I'm no fan-boy, but personally, Mario (not particularly known for speed) being able to keep up with Sonic (synonymous with speed) just doesn't seem to make sense to me. I'm sure others would agree.

[Changesampa]

uh...

Perhaps the reason for the lack of reviews is that people have a hard time commenting on strange things.
With this style of animation I'd recommend you consider getting into "animutation":
(http://www.newgrounds.com/collection /animutations). Anyway, on with the formal review.

Visuals:
Cutouts, cutouts and more cutouts (like an animutation). You did a decent job of cutting them out but there white spots around the edges. You seemed to know what to use when to use it and what little you did draw was pretty good (kudos on the lazor meme).

Animation:
"Pro" reviewers usually whine about tweens (having flash move the object rather than moving it yourself frame-by-frame). Of course this is probably hard to avoid when using cutouts.

Audio:
Pretty good. You seem to access to some well know music which is good since people like what is familiar.

Plot:
From what I can gather this is a scenario of what would happen if some Power Ranger wanna-bes went to São Paulo City, showing that what works in Japan doesn't work in São Paulo. It goes without saying that if one is using a site that is predominantly in english that one should at least have subtitles.