I liked it
Pros:
- Moved to the music
- Music was appropriate for animation.
Cons:
- Mostly nothing to look at
- Not so sure about the random Bill Cosby
Comments:
I like the Lavender Town theme.
I liked it
Pros:
- Moved to the music
- Music was appropriate for animation.
Cons:
- Mostly nothing to look at
- Not so sure about the random Bill Cosby
Comments:
I like the Lavender Town theme.
uh-huh....
Pros:
-Exciting music
- Had sound effects
Cons:
- Plot device of an excessively long power-up has already been used
(see: http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /515146)
- Aesthetics could use work
I know that it has already been used.. but thanks
Mostly flawless
Pros:
- Audio and visuals are professional-looking
- Successfully used 3D effects
Cons:
- No subtitles (arguably a must if you're going to post to an English website)
- Doesn't stand out too much from the other flashes of this quality
For a while I thought this was just a loop
Pros:
- Good artistic and animation quality
- Good voice acting
Cons:
- Powering up took way to long(1)
- Characters were a tad stiff
1) This was the major one. Even if this was parodying how much time is spent on DBZ doing one thing, you probably could have substituted the time with a series of "# minutes later" screens.
"I thought this was a loop"
Overall: Keep going
Pros:
- Good story
- Appropriate music
Cons:
- Visuals somewhat shoddy
- Animation is stiff
Keep practicing
You seem to have a good grasp of a few camera techniques (such as the dramatic explosion from behind bit). Still, you have a ways to go yet.
Overall: Very Good
Pros:
- Good story line
- Decent visuals
Cons:
- Too much reliance on talk
- Characters somewhat stiff
Comments:
On a literature-hosting website I was frequently told to "show-don't tell". I guess an example of this in flash on Newgrounds would be "Engineered".
Huh...
It seems that random weirdness isn't in high demand. It also seems to be a difficult thing to review. Either way, I liked the part with the dresser. For the future try some music and work on your art skills.
Overall:
Pros:
- Appropriate music
- Surprise end
Cons:
- Music stops too early
- Background and snowflakes a tad shoddy
Now that I think about it The music does cut out a bit to fast, maybe I should've made it fade.
The backgrounds are ones that I found for paper mario, sorry if they look like crap :(
And the snowflakes were animated very quickly so there wasn't much effort out into it.
Overall: Not really an animation
Pros:
- Looks good
- Appropriate music
Cons:
- Is little more than an animated picture
- Snow effect needs work
Comments:
Perhaps if you added a back story to the scene it would boost the rating like in here:
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /496723
Well thank you for your input sir
I actually couldn't agree more, the snow is definitely off. I feel it moves too fast and goes all over the place. Furthermore, I considered adding a short story but it would of meant adding a character to the picture.
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